tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6531553.post2837908223792943577..comments2023-06-27T01:34:35.359-07:00Comments on Ted Burke LIKE IT OR NOT: LOUISE GLUCK: Dancing with The Drone TED BURKEhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16610296721891201100noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6531553.post-90787600004970371432009-08-13T16:04:19.977-07:002009-08-13T16:04:19.977-07:00Ted, I really agree with your assessment and sugge...Ted, I really agree with your assessment and suggestions. I actually liked the poem, but your suggestions make it clear that the poem could be so much better. A visible image would really have helped. So would a bit more complexity. The explanations are the explanations, but what about the ambivalence of such moments? Saying no, meaning no, at this time and place with this person, no...but still wanting to be touched. The hesitancy of the moment makes the poem work a little, but it could do more. What about the possibility that the woman may want to touch as well as be touched? A visual image, perhaps of her touching something (like a drink or a bar rail) might suggest her desire to touch. Instead, the explanation is the explanation.Joshua Lindhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12753059301464292348noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6531553.post-63200542532104662032009-08-13T00:10:08.882-07:002009-08-13T00:10:08.882-07:00It's strange. A part of me disagrees with you...It's strange. A part of me disagrees with you on some level, as I enjoyed the poem. But I also wonder how MUCH I enjoyed the poem. Would I be thinking about this poem tomorrow morning?<br /><br />So I then wonder, are your suggestions what this poem needs? I think they may work after all; like any kind of workshop, suggestions are only truly helpful when the artist is able to pull them off.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com